11 Sept 2016

Formal Letter

To: Brad
From: Fazira
Date: September 2016
Subject: A Brief Introduction

Dear Brad,

I am Fazira and my degree programme is Sustainable Infrastructure Engineering (Building Services). I am 20 years old and I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic before my admission into SIT (Singapore Institute of Technology). The course I took in Ngee Ann Polytechnic was Hotel & Leisure Facilities Management (HLFM).

I have an interest in scented candles and have bought seven candles so far. My favourites from the seven candles would be the beach cabana scent, which smells like a certain type of soap, and the chocolate cake scent. I also enjoy relaxing, and would often just watch television or listen to music for long hours. 

As I have mentioned before, I am studying Sustainable Infrastructure Engineering (Building Services). I took up this course to further study the basics that I have learnt during my polytechnic study. I hope I will be able to understand enough of the details to be able to teach someone else. Also, with the knowledge, I would want to try and create a new idea if the opportunity arises.

Warm Regards,
Fazira

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5 comments:

  1. Unknown15 September 2016 at 09:56

    Post is well structured and detailed. You were Very concise in your likes and dislikes. For your likes, try to relate it more on engineering as its more related.
    For your last paragraph, you don't need to post about from which course you were from. It's repetitive.
    You might want to restructure this sentence 'Also, with the knowledge, I would want to try and create a new idea if the opportunity arises."

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  2. atisyam17 September 2016 at 08:45

    Hi Fazira

    Your email was pleasant to read. Your flow of content was nicely structured. However, I do feel that there could be some areas that could be elaborated more.

    For your last paragraph, it would be good if you could explain more in detail on the basics, which led you to take up the course. And lastly, I am hoping to know what kind of knowledge that will influence you to create this new idea of yours.

    Overall, a great effort!

    Masyita

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  3. Unknown17 September 2016 at 21:42

    Hi Fazira, your brief introduction was entertaining, especially the part about your interest in scented candles. That is certainly a cool interest and one I am curious about. I really wonder how awesome chocolate cake scented candles must have smelled like!
    As a whole, the post was really concise and straight to the point. Keep up the good work!

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  4. Unknown18 September 2016 at 08:30

    Hey Fazira,

    Its hard to come by someone who appreciate candles!Your post is straightforward but there arent much details on why you chose this course.
    Also your first sentence could be phrased as "I am Fazira and i am currently pursuing a bachelor in... "

    Aside from that i enjoyed reading your post!


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  5. Brad Blackstone21 September 2016 at 15:45

    Thank you for this clear, concise letter, Fazira. It is generally well structured and informative. Like other readers, I was impressed by your fascination with collecting scented candles. (It's a short leap from that to aromatherapy, which you might want to explore.)

    It was mentioned by Ming Kang that you might have included more detail as to why you joined this course. It seems that you have edited the post since he commented, though I'm not certain. Did you?

    All in all, this is a good effort!

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